Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Dont End Up Like This Thu Jul 21, 2011 4:30 pm | |
| To all character mods, please read this, for an example of what NOT to do with a bad character: - Quote :
- . . . You don't have W.I.P so let me get ahead with this <_<
Phys Description: You don't even have THREE lines! Put in Way more. As much as you can! Eye colour, eye shape, lips, nose, ears, chin, etc. Body build, what not?
Clothing: That's not All you're gonna wear right? Do you sleep naked or wut?
Personality: As soft as I can express it with one word, Bullocks. You need WAY MORE PERSONALITY.
History: If you can't make anything more fine by me, try to make it longer. Describe his childhood and big events that happened in his life.
Weaponry: ... What, the fuck? How am I or the people reading this going to know what it is? Length, Width, Thickness, Diameter or whatever. Material it is made of. Don't say crap like "it hits people hard", that is just stupid.
Role: Sorry, but what you wrote down is again bullocks. COPY, THE ROLE, FROM THE CHARACTER TEMPLATE!
Amount Of Rings in possession: Don't write a question mark, you start with One rank 1 ring. If you join a mafia (Forgot to note that), don't write a long sentence of "unknown blablabla", just write unknown. If you're still looking for stuff, take a peek at the Familia forum.
Ring Name: Too long, didn't read.. Why such a silly long name? Just say Mist Ring.
Skills & Disciplines: You wrote down gunner/gunmen. Why don't you have a gun, then? You get 2 FREE RANK 1 WEAPONS to start with. If you take a gun, either one Large magazine or Two small ones.
Techniques: You have THREE RANK 5 techniques, and you write 0/20? No, Rank is equal to TP. Rank 5 = 5 technique points!! So 15/20. Where the fel is your Dying Will Flames technique? You can't use them if you don't have the techs in there. Look it up in the techniques section. First technique you have: Hell, Hell, NO. 10 clones, are you crazy? Mukuro can't even do that, you're mist not cloud. ONE CLONE MAX. 10 is overpowered, I won't even allow that at rank 30. Rentokken: I don't get it. Describe it properly, and don't use "ass", it's As.
I sincerily, ADVISE you, to READ THE CHARACTER TEMPLATE! It's basically a guide, telling you Everything you need to do! READ THE RP RULES AGAIN. Leaving that behind, of you go and work on this more. Yes, This sounds harsh but it has a reason. Regardless of the suggestions (which seem like commands), dont be so asshole aggressive, Newbers dont respond well to "you fucking suck, read the rules again until you make it how i like it, asswipe" |
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Joseph
Posts : 409 Join date : 2011-01-14 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Dont End Up Like This Thu Jul 21, 2011 8:44 pm | |
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Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: Dont End Up Like This Thu Jul 21, 2011 8:45 pm | |
| From the KHR rp i saw on FTG |
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TheWill Admin
Posts : 4808 Join date : 2010-01-25 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Dont End Up Like This Fri Jul 22, 2011 6:10 am | |
| Now aren't you glad this place is less intense and more easygoing? :3
Anyway, I don't see why they're so strict when clearly, they have very little members and is highly inactive (for now). |
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Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: Dont End Up Like This Fri Jul 22, 2011 7:15 am | |
| Its not like their rules said anything other than "put as much as you can" i dont see why everything there SOUNDED like they wanted it a specific length, yet dont ever mention it...
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