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PostSubject: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 3:15 am

b]Account Name:[/b] Bace
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Name: Bace Velrena
Nickname: Bace
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Height: 6'0''
Weight: 142 lbs
Group: N/A
Reputation: 0
Rank: D
Affiliation: Neutral
Blood-type: O
Likes:
  • Traveling
  • Water
  • Reading
  • Magic (Obviously)

Dislikes:
  • Spiders
  • Hates being told by her Elders on what to do
  • Perverse People
  • Traps

Fears:
  • Spiders
  • Losing a loved one
  • Former Instructor

Physical Description: She is a tall, slender yet athletic woman with long black hair with locks of hair that frame her face down to her chin, well endowed chest, a high forehead, and light blue eyes that have long, voluminous lashes.
Magic Keywords: Call forth the Fates
Ki or Magic?: Magic
Clothing: She wears a revealing dark blue blouse that showed much of her chest and a loose sarong that exposed her long, slender legs with the symbol of her village adorned on it, a pair Onyx stone snake earrings, along with a dark cape sporting and blue high heel pumps.
Accessories:
  • Magic Card Holster
  • Enchanted Cards


Extra:
  • Arcanic Marking on left cheek

Picture:
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Personality Bace is a very complex woman. At first glance, she appears to be Shy, self conscious and a little bizarre. She can also act arrogant and stubborn, usually justifying her less-than-admirable actions with her apparent skill, causing her to later to feel bad about her actions. Because of her beauty and strength, she is used to seeing men and women, young and old alike, fall instantly in love with her when she is either working or walking around town. As a result, people don't think of her as a Witch. It was revealed the reason for Bace's tendency to hide herself in and sometimes have an attitude towards life was that because of her travels, she didn't want to ever show weakness again to anyone. She harbored a great fear of getting close to anyone, other than her own.

Deep down, Bace is a rather-sensitive and vulnerable woman who is afraid and concerned about how other people might react towards her. She is also much more soft and compassionate towards others when she opens up, she has also shown to be very sly and crafty when the situation demands it.

Bace is very brave and reckless when fighting her opponents. She will fight anyone who she considers her enemy, regardless what their reputation is or not. However, she has been easily defeated by opponents by not thinking things through and rushing in without planning ahead, something her Mother scolded her for several times. Bace has her own view of "Life" which differs from his own definition, and will fight for what she sees as the right thing to do.



History
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Class Card Magic User

Weaponry/Equipment

Rune Cards

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Stats – 45
Strength: 5
Accuracy:10
Endurance: 6
Speed:9
Intelligence: 15

Stat Points Earned: 0|0
Jewels Earned: 500,000

Sources:

Skills & Disciplines:
  • Tactician
  • Alteration Spells
  • Sealing


Magic Name: Card Magic
Magic Type: Holder Magic
Magic Description: Card Magic is a type of Rare Magic which revolves around the use of magical cards, which can produce a variety of effects, such as generating elements, and even seemingly living beings. Card Magic can be used for offense by employing the cards used for this Magic as long-range weapons by the user throwing them at their enemies. Users of this Magic can also combine their cards to generate particular effects. Aside from combat, Card Magic seems to possess other avenues for usage: users can apparently track down people to some degree through the cards' use. In addition, the cards can reproduce the effects from a variety of different forms of Magic, such as Water Magic or Sleep Magic, coming in as very versatile, if used the right way. These cards can also be linked to specific individuals, allowing the user to gain information about their status and location, as well as to communicate with them. Users of this Magic also have the ability to trap individuals inside their magical cards. However despite being trapped in them, the figures inside can still interact with those on the outside to an extent.
TP/KP Earned: 0|0
Techniques: (10)/10

Explosion Cards - (Rank 1)
Type: Offensive
Incantation: Smolder
Range: Long Range
Effect: A magic spell in which the user throws ten of their cards to create fire

Sealing Card - (Rank 6)
Type: Other
Incantation: Seal Away into your new Domain
Range: Close - Long range
Effect: A Magic spell that requires the full incantation, when the words have been spoken a blank card will be use as a catalyst as it then begins to unleash a vortex consuming the target. The effects of the card are a greater success if the opponent is in a weakened state. This spell is one of Bace's strongest techniques and takes a lot out of her. The Sealing can only capture Humans (npc's) for a shorten amount of time before her seal fades and she releases them(four posts). the sealing also works well on animals which its sealing won't break due to the animals will is different then that of a human. due to her level of skill she is only able to carry 5 sealed cards and after said spell is used it takes a total of ten minutes (10 post) to recover.

Altering Card - (Rank 3)
Type: Supportive
Incantation: Morph to better help me
Range: Close
Effect: By combining the Alteration card with a primary card it allows Bace to use a secondary card to fuse with the primary combining them to either make a new creature, an altered being, an equipped being or a combined elemental attack. The effects last for a long while before the spell


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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 4:00 am

I like this character, but her magic is too versatile. It has too many strengths, and not enough weaknesses. Get rid of some of those advantages, and add some drawbacks.

The sealing card needs a time limit. Something that powerful can only be used for a short time.
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 4:19 am

Can you adjust the Sealing Card to catch anything that is not a major character? like anything non human you can keep, but any NPCs have a post limit, like 4 posts.

and also a limit to how many sealed things you can carry

and a cooldown.... because it takes much out of you.
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 4:37 am

Hopefully I did it right :(
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 12:36 pm

@Kyle: Good point and you're right, though versatility shouldn't be too much of a problem as you're not bound by one magic, but rather the magic you have is your most compatible form of magic, but this comes with the drawback of being limited outside of the cards too.

Now that Bace has edited, I think it looks fine. Sealing might seem too limited if you can't use it on others assuming that there's precautions set up, you should be able to.

Almost there! :)


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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 12:43 pm

Okay, so make sure that any magic you do, your most effective magic will be Card Magic. Any other magic type you use, it will be less effective, because you are unskilled in that category.
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 1:08 pm

My eyes are now open and i see everything. wow how did i not catch these things last night?

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Explosion Cards - (Rank 1)
Type: Offensive
Incantation: Smolder
Range: Long Range
Effect: A magic spell in which the user throws ten of their cards to create fire

Is it an explosion? or is a a campfire creator?

how powerful is the fire? Is it like in a spy movie where they place a little stub lock breaker that goes *POP* and breaks the lock?

Other than simply "fire" specify how big of a fire/explosion. otherwise, call it Campfire cards :3.

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Altering Card - (Rank 3)
Type: Supportive
Incantation: Morph to better help me
Range: Close
Effect: By combining the Alteration card with a primary card it allows Bace to use a secondary card to fuse with the primary combining them to either make a new creature, an altered being, an equipped being or a combined elemental attack. The effects last for a long while before the spell

... huh? maybe its morning for me and im not thinking straight or maybe i just dont get the effect.

by combining the alterarion card x with a primary car y, it allows Bace to use a secdonary card z to fuse with the primary y combining them to either make a new creature a, an altered being, an equipped being or combined elemental attack. (is this a skill used for the future when you are stronger?)

so x+y=a is the same the as z+y=a so the alteration card is the same as the secondary card?

The effects last for a long while before the spell. (the effects last a while before the spell is active? so there are active without being active? in other words, is it a passive skill? where the skill is not really used but is in effect? explain)

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Sealing Card - (Rank 6)
Type: Other
Incantation: Seal Away into your new Domain
Range: Close - Long range
Effect: A Magic spell that requires the full incantation, when the words have been spoken a blank card will be use as a catalyst as it then begins to unleash a vortex consuming the target. The effects of the card are a greater success if the opponent is in a weakened state. This spell is one of Bace's strongest techniques and takes a lot out of her. The Sealing can only capture Humans (npc's) for a shorten amount of time before her seal fades and she releases them(four posts). the sealing also works well on animals which its sealing won't break due to the animals will is different then that of a human. due to her level of skill she is only able to carry 5 sealed cards and after said spell is used it takes a total of ten minutes (10 post) to recover.

woah... 10 posts... that's like one seal per whole page (roughly) :/ that's a crazy cooldown, if you think you got it. then you got it. (optional)


fix these and ill start approving :D reply first so i get a better understanding of what your spells do


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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 1:10 pm

Edit 1: Was busy re-reading the rules...
Edit 2: Just re-read the topic and yeah, agree with Crypt on parts.

Skills & Disciplines:

Tactician is acceptable however the other two are not as they aren't physicals of your class. This section is mainly for talents, arts, and martial arts and are not magical in however way thus alteration spells and sealing aren't meant to be here.



Magic:

Judging from the way its word out as holder magic, I believe this is inspired from Fairy Tail haha

Sealing Card - (Rank 6): Under Magic System, your character is unable to have a spell above rank 5. For your sealed cards, please place its information of acquiring such items in the Weaponry/Equipment section.

Altering Card - (Rank 3): Firstly, the spell is only at an average strength or a bit over the normal human capabilities so keep in mind, summoning strong beings are unavailable yet. "new creature, an altered being, an equipped being or a combined elemental attack" of what sort, it requires a general image of what they are or else it would be hard to imagine. A combined element attack, seperate that into a different spell instead. "The effects last for a long while before the spell" was not very clear so it would be better to place in a summoning limit, a duration limit and a cool down to prevent over summoning of unusual beings. Also, duration of effect for magic which does not focus completely on summoning will be really short unless there's a relation to the character's skill and discipline which are usually physical.



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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 1:25 pm

@Crypt: You don't need to (always) describe the output of a spell, in fact it can sometimes create problems. The output is defined by the rank, so yeah, the spell creates fire, but the rank clearly indicates that it's weak.

@Daisuke: You're right about the Level 6 rule, I was aware of that, however decided against it. Since it's actually a spell that uses an item as a medium, it's not actually her magical abilities at fault but rather (though, realistically speaking, using a level 6 rank with 6 endurance results in a hefty toll) the item that's in play.

The skills and disciplines under her list are in reference to her spell, they don't need to be there, but don't provide abilities she can do without her cards.
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyThu Feb 28, 2013 1:50 pm

@Will: Well yeah, its in the rules. We never really had a character which uses a holder type magic as in the Negi stories, there had only existed Ki and Magic Users and there were also those who directs their energy into their weapons like placing magic or ki into swords or perhaps even their fists.
Items infused with magics are usually based on physical damage to their magical effect but in this case, its using cards as a medium of spells so it slightly harder the give a solid feedback. I ain't really concerned on stats that much anymore since such cases has occurred real often in the past but since you mentioned it, yeah... so you handle that lol

Also
Skills & Disciplines: This is basically an optional section. Here you can list things your character is good at. Things such as talents, arts, and martial arts they have trained it. It is basically a place for you to catalog the things your character is good at. Naturally, things listed here mean your character is better at it than normal people, but not necessarily everyone else. Note: These things are not magical at all. Also include your preferred element here.
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PostSubject: Re: Bace Velrena   Bace Velrena EmptyFri Mar 01, 2013 6:41 pm

By the way. I noticed you made changes to your character. I didnt find out until i got curious to see if there was change. Really its our responsiblity to see the changes but really if the post says no one posted anything since the last post made, to our eyes you didnt change anything...

long story short, when you make changes to a character post a reply saying that you updated it, so we can see that something is newly posted and we will check it out.

really, your charcter looks good now except for the descriptions of the magic which i wanted but william doesnt, so after you reply to this and everyone checks it a-ok ill approve. it shouldnt have taken this long to approve your character.. :/ sorry for the wait.
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