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Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 6:34 pm | |
| Name: Tairus Nickname: Tai Age: he appears to be 15. (true age is 2065 Earth years. 11 Reposition cycles.) Gender: Male Height: 5'8" Weight:135 lbs. Groups: N/A Reputation: 0 Rank: D Affiliation: Neutral Blood-type: O Likes: Appears to like music, rock and roll particularly, heat and dry. Dislikes: Being Restrained, classical music, cold and wet. Fears: Anesthetics, doctors in white coats, and freezing to death. Physical Description: This "man" looks like he could be every woman's dark mysterious dreamy guy. He has black strait and spiked hair, dark black killer eyes, pale white skin, slighty slumped over, and fang like teeth (appears to be made by expert dentistry). - Spoiler:
his teeth are fang like because he was born from a group of destroyers that were native with dragons, specifically the Reposition. the Reposition are a group of Elder Dragons (like a government or high class family) SO BASICALLY Tairus is a mutt. Magic Keywords: "Aoru!" Ki or Magic? Magic Clothing: He likes to wear black T-shirts with blue jeans, but he can be bare chested. Accessories: He has a chain with a Blood Stone attached to it and a ring with strange 6-pointed star shaped symbol; both seems to glow occasionally. Extra:Picture:- Spoiler:
PersonalityTairus is a silent boy with a cool head. He has not hurt or killed anyone since he has lost his memory. he seems to be polite to everyone despite his dark past. he seems in control of his emotions and speaks only when spoken to. He has a strong will to protect the ones closest to him, such as his chosen partner (which is the person he has seen and favored the most of up until his separation with her). - Spoiler:
Tairus knows not where he received the necklace and ring, but as the creator of this character i will inform you he received the ring as a hand-me-down from the Head destroyer. His mother gave him the necklace to protect the his life and the ones he would find and come to love. his life span is much longer than an average human... in fact, his life span is X5000 longer than an average human... although he is more resistant to death than a normal human, he can still die. without the protection of his necklace charm, he is left undefended except by his will to survive. History Tairus is a descendant of the high class Destroyers who went mad with power. Relieved of his duty Tairus escapes and begins his journey to where he is now. - Spoiler:
History
Tairus' days in the past are dark and murderous. Tairus had been a nuisance to the Elder Dragons' existence and has died repeatedly. The ominous power he used to possess has been abused to kill many dragons and destroy just as as many civilizations for his pleasure. He is famous for being infamous for ending the War of The Elder Dragons by killing the leader of the Repositon, Torthon, and leaving the Reposition leaderless. Thus, after the death of the leader, the dragons began to scourage on each other until they agreed to by blood and force to punish the one responsible for the cruel aftermath of the leader's death. So the Elder Dragon race swore to banish Tairus to any other planet than theirs to hope to riddance themselves of the corrupted goals Tairus strives to accomplish. Tairus' banishment took place as an election of the new Elder Dragon leader of Reposition to use as a lure. By the time Tairus was successfully sealed and banished, one-third of the population had already died in the land of Elder Dragons. Tairus was banished to a strange planet often overlooked as a bystander planet. The planet had a name, and it was called Earth.
Once arrived on Earth, the seals holding Tairus down had broken due to the lack of magic on Earth. The seals could no longer hold him or his memories so he would awake powerless and lost. He awoke in a desert-like place with a populated city nearby. He looked at himself and saw he was wearing a tattered black shirt with broken restraints and chains over his chest. The chains were stuck to him like super-glue to skin, so he left them on his chest. his pants were roped together in a cross- knitting fashion but the ropes have burned and are no longer to be noticed as restraints. He walked toward the noise of the population and realized he didn't know who he was! He walked back to the broken and disappearing seals and saw the words "Tairus", "the" and "banshied" repeatedly. The words had no meaning to him but it seemed important, so he held on to these words. On the way to the city he sees a sign that says "Las Vegas 10 mi.".
*Lord knows how he could read English.*
Once arrived in "Las Vegas", the man, who knows not who he is, encounters many different style of people. among them are the groups of brown skinned men, who appear to be in groups from which he stood out so he avoided them. Then he encountered people in strange costumes and wild impersonations from which he still felt left out, so he continues his journey to find his "group". after hours of searching through crowds of people he meets someone who looks similar to him with chains on her leggings. She had pale skin and black covering some of her face. Wait! The black was just on her eyes and lips. He walked over to her looking as if he wanted to touch her and she was impressed, not by his strange addiction to her but by his clothing and style. She urged her body toward him and pressed her lips against his while he wrapped his arms around her (love at first sight?). As she kissed him he felt strange then suddenly it this world came to him from her view: the language, the way of life and how this world works.
She let go of him and asked, "what's your name, sexy?" the only way he could acknowledge was, "Tairus the banished." She replied, "Damn sexy name. How 'bout I call you Tai, baby." Tairus shrugged in agreement. "My name is Layna the servant, but call me Layn." Tairus smirked. "Im heading to Japan to get out of this hell of the USAsshole. But I need someone to be with me for security reasons." Tairus overheard an angry couple arguing and the outburst of one of the arguers was "Alright Bitch! lets go!" (im going to leave the readers to assume you know what Tairus said and skip the next few details.)
Tairus arrives in Japan. While arriving the Japanese police sieze Layn and Tairus puts up a fight. He is powerless but manages to get arrested and Layn is taken away. Tairus knows not how to handle court and is plead insane. He is sent to a Psychological Institute and sat there for 2 months. He learns more of earth within his stay. One day, the nurse comes into his room with a familiar face. It is certain that he knows her and asks, "Do I know you?" She responds with a positive voice, "You know it baby." He smiles and she takes him to an office for checkout. The door man denies the false claim and Layn bribes the man to ignore this particular case and let him go with the price on her bare chest. The two leave and are soon discovered by the police. They are chased all across Japan until they reach a foggy plain with a group of people gathering to go within the plain. The two escapees follow the group with the police frantically searching behind them in the wrong direction.
The group leader notices them and stops the group to examine the two. The leader glares at Tairus with an eye that looks into one's soul (or appears to) and sees something that an ordinary man might not see and replied, "I don't not know you young man, but i see great potential in you. I feel even though the path is not for an ordinary man, you may be able to walk it with your potential." The leader looks at Layn, "and who is she?" Tairus gulps and replies, "My sister!" Layn turned viciously and gave Tai an evil look that said, ""My sister?!?!" What the Hell?!" Tai Replies with an apologetic look that says, "sorry... he caught me off guard!" The man looks at the two and see the they really agree like siblings right now and says, "ok! because she is your sibling she may come too. But ONLY for that reason!" Tai and Layn give looks relief and walked with the group to a spire.
As they approach the spire, Layn is knocked over by some wall unseen by the naked eye. Tai comes to her effortlessly and notices she cannot enter. The group leader come to his aid and realizes the situation and answers, "she does not have what you have and therefore she needs to obtain one to enter to this spire." Tai asks, "what is it she needs to obtain and how does she acquire it?" the man answers, "she needs a Pure Soul and it needs to be activated by either a mage or by birth; she has done neither. Whether it be a Pure Evil or Pure Good, it needs to be active. She can go to the soul mage teleporter to right right over there. but once she enters, she needs to find you on the other side, for there is no return here until the next 2 weeks."
Tai and Layn glances over to the right and finds the circle of teleportation of which the Leader speaks and Layn asks, "Why cant Tairus come with me?" The Leader answers with confusion, "There are some thing that cant be explained briefly, but one thing is certain. The teleportation circle filters and sends inactive souls to the required activation mage. Those already with an active soul will be sent into the spire as if they are normal mages entering the other side."
As Layn understands the terms in a panicked manner, the Leader gestures Tai to return to the spire because the teleportation to the other side is approaching. Fearful of losing Layn forever, Tai understands that time is of the essence and a decision is needed to be made quickly. "Layn, I am overloaded with the number of thanks i need to give you for what you have done, but now i need you to do one more thing!" Layn tearing interupts, "OMG! dont you dare say go in there without me! What if I never see you again! what if I-" Tai regains speech and continues, "Layn, you need to trust me! once you go to the other side, whatever the hell that is, i promise these people will take care of you and i promise i will find you no matter how dangerous or how far away you are! You can do this!" Afraid and unsure about himself, Tai manages to slip a smooch before he orders Layn to the Teleportation circle. Once gone separate ways, neither looks back to see the other.
Once Tai enter the "other side" he asks the man what the other side is. He answers, "The Magic World." ClassDestroyer = a mix of Combat Mage and Melee Combat Fighter Weaponry/Equipment[Destroyer Emblem] The ring charm that promotes offensive spells for a Destroyer. (Descriptions/Effects) A 6-pointed star charm on his ring. [Dragon Blood Stone] The necklace charm that protects him from things that would normally kill him or endanger his life. (Descriptions/Effects) The crimson red, Elder Dragon Blood Stone charm on his necklace provides him with protection to keep to user alive by supporting the users life to live to its fullest potential (in Tairus' case, to live most of his 10,000+ Earth year lifespan). Dragon's Blood Give the user a boost to his immune system to to decrease the chance of ailments. Stats – 63 Strength: 13 Accuracy: 13 Endurance: 17 Speed: 13 Intelligence: 7 Stat Points Earned: 0|18 Jewels Earned: 1,070,000 Sources:Where am I? 1MP, 2SP and 50,000Drachma Dragon Training 2SP, 1MP & 150,000 Drachma Journey to Tharsis 3 SP, 2 MP and 210,000 Drachma A New Face (Open to 1) 2 SP, 2 MP and 160,000 Drachma Story Line 9 SP, 7 MP Skills & Disciplines: Spoken Magic: Tairus speaks "Aoru" to "sheathe" his fire. To unsheathe the fire, he relaxes. If he can't relax, he can't unsheathe. Short Tempered: He prefers finishing fights quickly. Slow, long fights bother him and usually bring anger to him, thus his anger make him rather unpredictable and... "mad with power" and leaves him unable to think clearly and often attacks recklessly. Fear of Water: Tai is fearful of water and swimming. That being said, he cant swim, handle boat rides without being sick and is fond of dry climates. This makes him irritated with water and can weaken him slightly. Magic Name: Spoken Fire Magic Magic Type: Element = Fire, Offensive MP/KP Earned: 0|13 Magic Description: Tairus will speak his incantation to "sheathe" his fire, then he is able to attack after "Aoru" with other incantations. Techniques: 21/23Scorching Javelin - (5) Type: Offensive Incantation: Yol Bir Ro Range: 25m Effect: Using the flame generated from "Aoru," Tairus launches a flaming spear of fire at the enemy. The spear has some penetrating effect to pierce barriers. Flash Fire - (5) Type: Offensive Incantation: Yol Range: 5m Leaves burns ; anyone looking at it is left dazed from the flash Effect: Throws his fist, filled with the "Aoru" to cause a flashbang effect. In the range the explosion is an equal to a grenade. Ember Hellfire - (5) Type: Offensive Incantation: Fire from Abyss, hear my call; burn the unworthy, burn them all. Range: A Flamthrower's range Effects: The attack sends a wide flamethrower like effect that widens as it reaches farther. it leaves a napalm type fire on those affected. Hellfire's Chains of Binding - (5) Type: Immobilize Incantation: Chai Yol dovor kin Rah Range: "Reasonable and not miles away" range Effects: Chains, that are on fire...of course, rise from the ground, bind the target, and burns the target where the chains contact. The chains move roughly like a shunpo. Shunpo - (1) Type: Evasive Incantation: Shu Range: Roughly 12m-18m Effects: Tairus dashes almost instantaneously to a destination leaving an image of himself that looks like a heat wave. Tairus does not need "Aoru" to Shunpo.[code][quote] Story Line
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| | | Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 7:24 pm | |
| We're gonna need an actual description of your magic, not stylized text.
And im not entirely sure if we can let you use 4 elements at once from a ring, while the ring makes weapons without any techniques. |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 8:15 pm | |
| explain what you mean an actual desciption? and stylized text so i may make corrections. |
| | | Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 8:17 pm | |
| Then your going to need actual techniques, not just "He can control all fire everywhere"
And still need a description of what your magic does. Like what type of magic it is, how it works, and what its spells entail.
EX:
Fire Magic
-This user can coontrol fire in any shape he wants, molding it into shapes and attacks. It is all offensive, and has no defensive spells
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| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 8:18 pm | |
| one more thing... i need help with the spells and techniques |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 8:22 pm | |
| ok. thats easy! i meant that he creates a flame on his hand and from there however his skill or expierence is he can expand the flame size or tempurature. i was thinking his first move would be a ember punch which is a punch with a small flare on his knuckles.
how is that?
do i keep this or different idea? |
| | | Umibouzu
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 9:14 pm | |
| Actually your spells would be rather minor cause they're restricted to a ring, and 4 elements is entirely absurd, even with 2 objects. Go for one GOOD one, rather than using all 4 with sub-par techniques |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 9:34 pm | |
| i have now 1 element per artifact i change it fire and water ring and necklace |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 9:35 pm | |
| i made a set of spells i dont knwo if i did the spells right... i think they are noobie.... opinion? |
| | | Umibouzu
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Jul 29, 2011 9:40 pm | |
| Your first two spells are kinda redudant, they do the same thing as two basic spells: Ardescat and Cura. except cura doesnt create a barrier.
I still think it'd be easier to go with just Fire, since healing and fighting dont mix, at all.
Take those points and make a Sagitta Magica (which is ALWAYS USEFUL) |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sat Jul 30, 2011 2:52 am | |
| I THINK I DID IT THIS TIME!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 OOHHH YEAAA!!!! |
| | | Kairu-kyun
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sat Jul 30, 2011 3:09 pm | |
| This is my personal preference, but I think you should add incantations~ If you do, which is entirely up to you, they don't even have to be long! Also, you need a rank for Ember, it needs to be at least 1 for you to be able to use it. |
| | | Kairu-kyun
Posts : 1120 Join date : 2010-01-25 Age : 30 Location : Fayetteville, North Carolina, U.S.A.
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sat Jul 30, 2011 3:19 pm | |
| Don't forget to tally up the ranks and put them in Techniques! |
| | | Kairu-kyun
Posts : 1120 Join date : 2010-01-25 Age : 30 Location : Fayetteville, North Carolina, U.S.A.
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sat Jul 30, 2011 10:03 pm | |
| I think it's good so far~ 1/2 approval~ |
| | | Daisuke
Posts : 1468 Join date : 2010-05-02 Location : Position Lock On
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 1:49 am | |
| Didnt ya'll notice this earlier?: - Quote :
- Techniques: 6/15
Anyways, my turn. Please do provide an image of your character for a better perception given to other. - Quote :
his life span is much longer than an avergae human... in fact, his life span is X5000 longer than an average human...
You could still die like an average human right? It may not be immortal like living forever but there should be a possibility of this character dying even before reach the limit of his life span I suppose. Note that this part of the statement in the persoanality, its more of a characteristic but whatever... I ain't really sure where else you should state this anyways.
Based your history, which is on another thread... What happened to Tai and Layn upon reach Mundus Magicus? Was Layn, Tai's precious one whom got seperated from him like said: - Quote :
He has a strong will to protect the ones closest to him, such as his chosen partner (which is the person he has seen and favored the most of up until his separation with her)
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Weaponry/Equipment His fists, with some kind of charms on his necklace and ring. The necklace charm promotes defensive abilities. The ring, offensive. He can spawn weapons of fire such as fire swords, flame spears, etc. with the magic on his ring, but this ability is promoted at later ranks. His fist is not a weapon not an equipment, its part of his body... Anyways. just arrange his nechlace and ring according to their effects like this: (Weapons/Equipments) - (Descriptions/Effects) Also, the weapons spawn from the ring must be in a technique or else it would deem no harm at all. - Quote :
Endure - (2) Type: Support Incantation: Haya! Range: Self Effect: Gives Tairus a +5 point boost to Endurance.
How long does it last followed by its cooldown. - Quote :
Ember Arrow - (2) Type: Offensive Incantation: Hi no ya! Range: Distant Effect: Using the flame generated from Ember, Tairus launches arrows of fire at the enemy. The number of arrows is equivalent to the charge of Ember.
Ember Fist - (2) Type: Offensive Incantation: Kasai panchi! Range: Close Effect: Uses the flame generated from Ember to punch the enemy with a fist of fire. Damage dealt is equivalent to the charge of Ember.
What are these 'charge of Ember' anyways? |
| | | TheWill Admin
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 2:04 am | |
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| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 3:26 pm | |
| i used to have a move called "Ember" but umi tols me to get rid of it... so i do need to change that... ty for point that out... ill get to the mistakes soon.. |
| | | Umibouzu
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 7:30 pm | |
| If you use Sagitta Ignis and your Ember Punch, you should be good on techniques Crypt |
| | | Joseph
Posts : 409 Join date : 2011-01-14 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 9:36 pm | |
| Say your Magic Type (Offensive, defensive, supportive), its pretty much offensive
You need Magic Description
I'm not to fond of the Dragons Will making him hard to kill permanently. I would understand that any normal human(a knife or bullet) would not be able to kill him. But there are many high power people here that would be able to kill him. I will agree on the part that you can heal your body with time. |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Sun Jul 31, 2011 11:24 pm | |
| welll.... thats just so his mother wont have to see his boy, Tairus, dead. it would make her happy... :) |
| | | Umibouzu
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Mon Aug 01, 2011 4:53 am | |
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| | | B★RS Admin
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| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Mon Aug 01, 2011 5:02 am | |
| You made them rage-quit the forumz |
| | | Umibouzu
Posts : 2815 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Mon Aug 01, 2011 5:03 am | |
| Lol, i tried to help him. But whatever, he was Kyle's friend. He was just about to be approved too :( |
| | | Daisuke
Posts : 1468 Join date : 2010-05-02 Location : Position Lock On
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Mon Aug 01, 2011 6:17 am | |
| -Character Application Abolished-Creator, Crypt96, gave up on this character. -This topic has been moved-An automatic message |
| | | Crypt96
Posts : 404 Join date : 2011-07-24 Age : 31 Location : Equestria
| Subject: Re: Tairus by Crypt96 *re-edited-ed* *picture Drawn! need color :3* Fri Aug 05, 2011 8:26 pm | |
| I have extreme stare contested the computer screen and looked for anything that might cause reediting and i have returned this character to the drawing board multiple times fixing these errors...
i came up with this almost final product and i await responses...
i fixed the many issues that came up in moar than one lap and hope this approval comes earlier than my first attempt.
if there are still errors, i hope they are minor. |
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